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TOURISM IN MALAYSIA.

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Malaysia is a multiracial country. Malaysia has a population of 23.27 million consisting of 61

percent Malays, 30 percent Chinese, 8 percent Indians and 1 percent of other ethnic groups.Malaysia is unique because of its diversity of races, religions and cultures, the stability of the

country and many places of interests. Besides, there are many international achievements

which are the pride of our nation.

Diversity of races, religions and cultures is a significant characteristic of our nation. Malaysia

is a multiracial country with a rich cultural heritage. Unique to Malaysia is the 'Open House'

concept where during the various cultural and religious festival like Hari Raya, Chinese New

Year, Deepavali, Gawai Day and others, friends and families and even strangers would visit

the homes of those who are celebrating the festival, to wish them well and enjoy the feast

prepared by the hosts. Although the visitors may be from different races, they still cantolerate with each other and live under the same roof where they celebrate the festival

together. This will help to strengthen the ties among themselves.

Moreover, the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is also a uniqueness of us. We live

harmoniously in a country where there are no wars and conflicts among Malaysians. War is

dreadful and it may deteriorate humans' lives. We are fortunate that our country is safe and

runs off the war. So, people can live safely here. Somehow, Malaysia is a paradise for those

Iraqis or Pakistanis. Besides, our country is freed from natural disasters such as

earthquakes. Earthquakes may bring death and destroy many buildings. Therefore, Malaysia

is unique because of the stability and peaceful environment.

On top of that, there are many places of interests in country such as beaches, islands and

rain forest. Malaysia's rain forest is considered as the oldest in the world. The diverse

species of animals and plant life continue to excite a great deal of scientific research. Many

believe that some undiscovered plant may hold cures too many currently incurable human

diseases. There are many islands in our country such as Pulau Langkawi, Pulau Redang,

Pulau Ketam and many others. Pulau Langkawi has a lot of historitical informations. Those

who are in favour of history can go there to explore the history of that place. All the beaches

in those islands are beautiful. The sand is soft and white. The accommodation is well-

established and that makes those islands ideal places to visit.

Following this, there are also international achievements of our country. Those

achievements include the existence of Kuala Lumpur International Airport (KLIA), Formula

One (F1) racing circuit and the Petronas Twin Towers. KLIA is unique because it has all that

is needed for business, entertainment and relaxation within its boundaries. The airport is

part and parcel of the Multimedia Super Corridor where high technology industries are being

actively developed. Nevertheless, there is a Formula One Race Track near the airport, so

foreign car racing enthusiasts from all over the world can come for a visit to gather here.

Besides that, Petronas Twin Towers which is a building that soars 452 metres into the sky isonce upon a time, the tallest building in the world and yet it is a national pride to the people

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of Malaysia.

In short, Malaysia is unique that it has diversity of races, religions and cultures, a stable and

peaceful environment, places of interest and some internal achievements. Those areimportant characteristic of our nation. It is rich of cultural heritage; it would be worth to play

a visit here.

Corrections made in the essay above:

Do not put an extra hyphen - multiracial is correct, multi-racial and multi racial are wrong

Use noun instead of adjective - diversity of races, religious and cultures is wrong; it should

be diversity of races, religions and cultures; a unique of us is wrong, a uniqueness of us is

correct.

This sentence is wrong because there should be two phrases in the sentence where you use

the conjunction although -Although the visitors may be from different races. HoweverIt

should be although the visitors may be from different races, they

Articlean unique is wrong, a unique is correct.

Subject-verb agreement - the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is should be the stability

and peacefulness of Malaysia isWrong: there is no wars and conflicts. Correct:

there are no wars and conflicts.

Use adverb instead of nounwe live in a harmony country should be we live

harmoniously in a country or we live in harmony.

Singular or plural - humans' life is wrong, humans livesis correct, human beings is more

appropriate

No plural formWrong: historitical informations. Correct: historical information

Avoid using informal word - has lots of is informal, has a lot of is formal

Essay Rating: 3.5

Good points and examples are discussed in the essay. However, there are some gross and

minor grammatical and spelling errors. Errors includesubject-verb agreement errors and

wrong use of nouns and adjectives. All in all, there is still room for improvement. Keep up

your writing effort!

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